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Tythaeus

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Aug 2, 2015
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Tythaeus
Sup everyone. I'm starting to get the hang of editing videos and commentary, but there's ALWAYS something that can be improved. Feedback on my commentary, editing, gameplay, music, etc., would be greatly appreciated!

Sample video (its not long dw):

Also, would an intro, end card, and a lower third make my videos more professional/better?