Request Can someone please review my commentary for me?

[The Bossman]

So yeah, I just want any of my videos watching and to tell me if my commentary is actually engaging etc. Also if the sound levels are good or could be improved. If you are willing to do that can you please do it for one of the videos in the last week please. Thank you in advance.

 

[fattmat]

I'll give you some additional feedback on here as well Boss ^^

On your latest video for the world record attempt, it sort of just cut in. We could have missed some vital commentary. A 57 minute video is a little extreme for people to focus on, breaking it into parts would help. I'd cut out more footage as well, because standing out with a let's play for minecraft is the hardest experience ever.