whatsup dude, i think your video is quite good however i think you would be doing better if you positioned your camera in a better place and maybe spoke with a little bit more energy, like put some more enthusiasm into your video as to me you kind of came accross as you didnt want to be there and if your audience feels like you dont want to be there then they wont want to be there either.
not meaning to offend you at all man but thats my honest opinion i hope the feedback is helpful!